Talk:Shadow Broker Dossiers/Kymir Jhoeli

Formatting
The dossiers are supposed to be written in a certain format. Do you mind if I make some changes? -- Gnostic 01:45, December 6, 2010 (UTC)

I wrote it the way I did for the sake of grammar. I know the description of the person is supposed to be all in fragments, but I can't stand improper grammar. Not sure if there are other format corrections you want to make, though, so respond please. I'd prefer to keep the grammar the way it is, regardless.

Lovelyb0nes 01:55, December 6, 2010 (UTC)

I'm not a fan of improper grammar either, but part of the point of these things is to force yourself to think (and write) like someone else. In the case of the opening blurb, it should be written as if you are the subordinate (probably salarian) of a massive, highly-intelligent predator who's got millions of dossiers to review and very little patience for subordinates who deviate from his instructions. As for the other edits, transcripts are almost always written in script format (speaker 1: quote 1, speaker 2: quote 2, etc.), and with the transcripts seen in the dossiers in ME2, sounds are noted in brackets, not parentheses. -- Gnostic 02:55, December 6, 2010 (UTC)